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Comment on Can You Believe It? Cash for Your Old Banger! by car removal sydney

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Comment on Tell me what you think? by Dorotka

Dorotka — Wed, 04 Jan 2012 21:41:26 +0000

you start a lot of the sentences with “gregory”, you should replace some with “he” instead, i hate it when authors do that it also makes the story a pain to read.
besides that, i think you have good ideas and should keep going! :)

Comment on Tell me what you think? by JayJay

JayJay — Wed, 04 Jan 2012 21:23:28 +0000

this is good but a bit bland to start a story with

Comment on Tell me what you think? by Guitarpicker

Guitarpicker — Wed, 04 Jan 2012 21:05:13 +0000

What you have written is ordinary day-to-day living with nothing spectacular or impressive to read.

Further, the only character in much of your story is Gregory so we know who is going through a mundane day of non-excitement until he reaches the convenience store (not capitalized).

Last, brush up on the proper use of punctuation, particularly with ending question marks or exclamation points when a long unnecessary tag follows. You should place a comma before the ending quotation mark in this case.

Go back and edit what you have written, rid yourself of unnecessary filling and inject something out of the ordinary.

I suggest you pick up a copy of Strunk and White’s “The Elements of Style.” It’s in pocketbook size and well worth the $ 7.50 to acquire it.

Comment on Tell me what you think? by gmr_2122

gmr_2122 — Wed, 04 Jan 2012 20:48:27 +0000

You’re giving us a lot of unnecessary information. How is his morning routine going to contribute to the story?
“While he was doing that, he was also…” is only the first of many weak sentences.
And when you keep repeating, “He did this. He did that.” with no variation, your story becomes extremely weak.

Comment on Tell me what you think? by Meghan

Meghan — Wed, 04 Jan 2012 20:16:01 +0000

You’ve spent too much time describing him getting ready. I’m also confused to how old the character is.. .

Most of the descriptions are really good however there are too many commas. I used to have this problem in writing but if you spend some time actually analysing two or three pages in a published book you’ll realise that they are not needed in most places.

Good luck writing!

Comment on Tell me what you think? by Luvlife119

Luvlife119 — Wed, 04 Jan 2012 20:00:02 +0000

I like it!!! I think you should finish it :) good luck

Comment on Old Honda metal outboard fuel tanks. It is difficult to see much inside, but they are faily rusty outside.? by 45 auto

45 auto — Tue, 03 Jan 2012 15:55:06 +0000

Scape them or U will have many issue including rust rings on your deck.

Comment on can anyone help me with my resume? by Ken

Ken — Sun, 01 Jan 2012 08:07:15 +0000

Malis is right, shorten it a lot . For example:
Factory Worker
09/1999 – 02/2000 TI Automotive Ossian, IN
Build, modify, repair and inspection of gas tanks.
12 hr. shift.